Tell me how you think.Dont just say all poems suck.
Ghost, Ghost, full of pain
Crying out a bloody rain
Its body decays and rots
Once remembered but now not
When seen agian it wants to cause kane
One bite kills faster than a train
When devours the murderous host
All is well at least for the most
Second stanza is awful, and the first line of it doesn't make sense. The first stanza is solid, though.
Kills faster than a train?
A TRAIN?!
What the fuck?
Honestly.
Go get creativity.
It ran off somewhere.
(11-13-2008, 12:16 AM)Oddball Wrote: [ -> ]Kills faster than a train?
A TRAIN?!
What the fuck?
Honestly.
Go get creativity.
It ran off somewhere.
This but a little politer.
I made this back in 3rd grade so dont flip out about a bad poem. This is quite random but I got a D for it being to scary for 3rd graders.
I don't think that's why you got a D...
(11-17-2008, 06:00 PM)GrooveMan.exe Wrote: [ -> ]I don't think that's why you got a D...
mwahahahaha
(11-17-2008, 06:00 PM)GrooveMan.exe Wrote: [ -> ]I don't think that's why you got a D...
Thank you Grooveman for being my first laugh today
(11-17-2008, 05:47 PM)megazario Wrote: [ -> ]random but I got a D for it being to scary for 3rd graders.
Apparently, all the children in your third grade class are pussies.
(11-17-2008, 06:00 PM)GrooveMan.exe Wrote: [ -> ]I don't think that's why you got a D...
Everyone wanted to post this.
Not all poems suck. This one just does.
Also, what grade are you, and why are you showing old shit.
No actually Rags they didn't care the teacher is just a fagget.
If I was a teacher I'd give you a 50 because only half the poem is really solid. Now that is an F. I think the teacher was being a bit more generous when they gave you a D.
(11-18-2008, 04:08 PM)megazario Wrote: [ -> ]No actually Rags they didn't care the teacher is just a fagget.
fagot
but regardless
you suck
Why are you posting a 3rd grade poem and wanting criticisms? It says to post what we think of it.
What grade are you in?
dont know why everyone is bashing this so much
the first stanza realy inst that bad