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To be REALLY honest with you, I have to say this game seems kind of cool and really creative, and I'll be willing to drop in and help you whenever I can. However I found a few things that could be fixed if you want to fix it though since it's YOUR game not MINE. Whatever your choice be I will still respect you for it, and help you. The first thing is that when your story takes place Chuck Norris was just 5, and not well-know being that his first film was in 1968. Also try to choose a different setting, time, and war because orcs, trolls, demons and elves. Don’t quite fit in the 1945 timeline. So it'd be much more fun to make up your own war and such. Another thing is that the two colonies should get into an argument by something more serious (like one colony is being total hogs, or money issues) So basically it's a nice and creative story, and I sense you have some nice creativity inside you just waiting to burst out, so let it out by creating vivid and imaginative worlds with a bright cast of characters and such. So yeah this is just advice and whether you choose to follow it or not, is your choice. I'll help you with the sprites just tell me how you want the characters to look. And well good luck, but most importantly, have fun designing your game!

(08-18-2009, 04:52 PM)El Loco Wrote: [ -> ]To be REALLY honest with you, I have to say this game seems kind of cool and really creative, and I'll be willing to drop in and help you whenever I can. However I found a few things that could be fixed if you want to fix it though since it's YOUR game not MINE. Whatever your choice be I will still respect you for it, and help you. The first thing is that when your story takes place Chuck Norris was just 5, and not well-know being that his first film was in 1968. Also try to choose a different setting, time, and war because orcs, trolls, demons and elves. Don’t quite fit in the 1945 timeline. So it'd be much more fun to make up your own war and such. Another thing is that the two colonies should get into an argument by something more serious (like one colony is being total hogs, or money issues) So basically it's a nice and creative story, and I sense you have some nice creativity inside you just waiting to burst out, so let it out by creating vivid and imaginative worlds with a bright cast of characters and such. So yeah this is just advice and whether you choose to follow it or not, is your choice. I'll help you with the sprites just tell me how you want the characters to look. And well good luck, but most importantly, have fun designing your game!

Thank you so much man, I accept your help ^^ For the story, I will work back on it, but not that much, cause I want to make it funny, so Maybe i will change the war, and the years, but for the dialogue, I'll keep it like that, only get off Chuck Norris... Thank you I will send you the artworks of the characters by E-mail... For the look...

Naruto: http://www.spriters-resource.com/ds/naru...heet/20541
MSS: http://www.spriters-resource.com/ds/magi...heet/25615
Yu-Gi-Oh!: http://www.spriters-resource.com/gameboy...sheet/9762

So take the one you feel best Thanks again

The problem with the story is that it's bad.
I know it's supposed to be, but you're doing it wrong.
There's a difference between a story being "ironically bad" and "just bad." This is just bad.

(08-18-2009, 05:44 PM)Tyvon Wrote: [ -> ]The problem with the story is that it's bad.
I know it's supposed to be, but you're doing it wrong.
There's a difference between a story being "ironically bad" and "just bad." This is just bad.

Who's bad?


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I feel so tempted to just warn you for that. Not only was that visual pun pathetically lame, you're not in Spamhaul.

Keep the LOL SO RANDOM shit there.

(08-18-2009, 06:54 PM)GrooveMan.exe Wrote: [ -> ]I feel so tempted to just warn you for that. Not only was that visual pun pathetically lame, you're not in Spamhaul.

Keep the LOL SO RANDOM shit there.

Sorry sir won't happen again. I'll get back on topic.

woah woah hold on a sec there
I already made a SERIOUS post about how to improve your story on the last page and you totally ignored it

See, your problem is that the story is supposed to be funny. I totally understand that. But the problem is, it's not. AT ALL. Chuck Norris is NOT funny. A story about Chuck Norris and Darth Vader will NOT be funny.
Everything about it is bad. Don't keep the dialogue. It's bad.
You actually have a somewhat decent idea for the RPG races part, but the rest is BAD.
I recommend making a serious story, and improving your graphics first.

Also why are you using Shonen Jump characters ugh

i agree on the story, totally random, have it make sense why there are orcs, elves, and trolls employed by the government, and i stopped reading the dialogue after the first to lines of an orc and demon, very bad.

Better yet, don't make it modern at all. The character have a medieval theme, so make the rest of the game have one, too.

(08-18-2009, 11:13 PM)Vipershark Wrote: [ -> ]Better yet, don't make it modern at all. The character have a medieval theme, so make the rest of the game have one, too.

Okay, I'll rewrite the entire story... For the graphics, I said it before: THESE ARE ARTWORKS!!! It sucks, yes, but it's only an artwork...

I'm talking about all the graphics in general. The buttons and text are pretty much the default flash animation style. Not only do they look horribly generic, but the amount of clashing colors doesn't help much, either.

And that "character portrait" looks bad as well. Artwork isn't supposed to look bad.

(08-19-2009, 11:08 AM)Vipershark Wrote: [ -> ]I'm talking about all the graphics in general. The buttons and text are pretty much the default flash animation style. Not only do they look horribly generic, but the amount of clashing colors doesn't help much, either.

And that "character portrait" looks bad as well. Artwork isn't supposed to look bad.

Just shut up, I said they were artworks and I'll do them back, I'll do it completely different, it was only to show you a picture... IT'S NOT THAT WHO IS GOING TO BE IN THE GAME... Do you understand?

What the fuck.
I'm giving you honest critique (not even making fun of the game anymore) and you just blow me off.