http://pixeljoint.com/pixelart/43050.htm

Make the hips a little bigger

Yes, larger hips. More sag on the breasts as they are too wide at the moment for a tiny bikini top to hold, make it so the bikini top's strings aren't straight, change the feet to point forward, and shade her legs properly. The inside needs much more shading compared to what the knee has. Oh, and broad shoulders.

huge breasts, tiny hips ugh
also tits suffer from gravity. do them oval, but not horizontal oval like you did, but vertical oval.
make the thighs like, well, thighs. They have a curve.

also, her neck has this huge shadow but the rest of the body doesn't get even close to that darkness
also her face is all AAd but her body isn't
so yeah, you have a lot of things to work over :2

lookit sum hentai

or http://fineart.sk/photos/figure/013.JPG

also knees arent always facing forward
shoulders should curve more, less angular

thanks for all the critiques guys, especially this:

des Wrote:or http://fineart.sk/photos/figure/013.JPG

im working on a better version noww~

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i .. tried to fix what i could. dont want to change the feet though, personally. and it's hard to AA the outline of a body when its got a transparent background, so i cant really do that. :1

http://pixeljoint.com/pixelart/43050.htm UPDATED!!!

Her lower body looks pretty damn manly. TBH the reference des linked isn't so amazing! The hips shouldn't be much narrower than the shoulders, often they're wider.
If you simplify a female figure, it's a triangle poiting this way ^
if you simplify a male figure, it's a triangle pointing this way V
most of a woman's weight is usually in the stomach, hips and thighs.
Obviously there's lots of variation, but I'm talking in really general terms.

Curve her collarbone some. When it's dead straight across the line of the shoulder like that it looks pretty manly. It curves down a bit in women.
http://www.hellagant.com/shop/images/Hel...V-neck.jpg check dis
not a super reference since she's got a shoulder raised but it should give you an idea of what I'm talking about.

Just mess with her overall shape some
again, not the best reference ever because she is kind of muscly and it is AIRBRUSHED LIKE WHOA, but this is something like the shape you want (possibly NSFW because tits)
http://174.129.235.226/photos/display_pi...7031,1.jpg
There's a reason the phrase 'hourglass figure' exists!
The curve should be pretty soft, you've made the shape of her hips kind of harsh.

Sorry if I'm being too vague or something! I don't knooow

needs to be way less stiff. as she is now, looks as if she was inside a coffin.

you better use a more dinamic pose, play more with some references.

(05-20-2009, 08:28 PM)DigiTamer Metaru Wrote: needs to be way less stiff. as she is now, looks as if she was inside a coffin.

you better use a more dinamic pose, play more with some references.

so you're saying

start all over

?

eh

exactly.

(05-20-2009, 09:14 PM)DigiTamer Metaru Wrote: exactly.

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(05-20-2009, 09:06 PM)Fuck Im Great Wrote: eh

More like

(05-21-2009, 12:29 AM)Zac Wrote:

(05-20-2009, 09:06 PM)Fuck Im Great Wrote: eh

More like

see but

when you're looking straight forward at a girl

their feets arent straight forward

and its not top down so

shouldnt they be slanted? o__o ;