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Darkness' Heroes
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woah woah hold on a sec there
I already made a SERIOUS post about how to improve your story on the last page and you totally ignored it

See, your problem is that the story is supposed to be funny. I totally understand that. But the problem is, it's not. AT ALL. Chuck Norris is NOT funny. A story about Chuck Norris and Darth Vader will NOT be funny.
Everything about it is bad. Don't keep the dialogue. It's bad.
You actually have a somewhat decent idea for the RPG races part, but the rest is BAD.
I recommend making a serious story, and improving your graphics first.

Also why are you using Shonen Jump characters ugh
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Darkness' Heroes - by tiguidou - 08-17-2009, 07:19 AM
RE: Darkness' Heroes (Help Request) - by tiguidou - 08-17-2009, 04:01 PM
RE: Darkness' Heroes (Help Request) - by Link - 08-17-2009, 06:05 PM
RE: Darkness' Heroes (Help Request) - by tiguidou - 08-17-2009, 07:30 PM
RE: Darkness' Heroes (Help Request) - by tiguidou - 08-17-2009, 09:04 PM
RE: Darkness' Heroes (Help Request) - by rayman18 - 08-17-2009, 08:26 PM
RE: Darkness' Heroes (Help Request) - by Dazz - 08-18-2009, 04:23 AM
RE: Darkness' Heroes (Help Request) - by tiguidou - 08-18-2009, 06:24 AM
RE: Darkness' Heroes (Help Request) - by El Loco - 08-18-2009, 04:52 PM
RE: Darkness' Heroes (Help Request) - by tiguidou - 08-18-2009, 05:25 PM
RE: Darkness' Heroes (Help Request) - by El Loco - 08-18-2009, 06:15 PM
RE: Darkness' Heroes (Help Request) - by El Loco - 08-18-2009, 06:59 PM
RE: Darkness' Heroes (Don't need help anymore) - by Vipershark - 08-18-2009, 10:41 PM

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