10-28-2009, 05:36 PM
Good to see some attempts at something other then chibi from you. It's better then I expected it'd be, but it still has some problems. The face for one, the angling doesn't really make much sense.
The back arm is not defined enough for the positioning that you want - instead of looking like it's going back and resting on his hip, it looks like it's a weird shortened blob. There are also issues with your other arm, though these are more minor, and mostly deal with the hand and elbow areas.
Structure arms based on the shoulder, elbow and hand - from there, if you have a proper understanding of those, the arms themselves should fall into place. As of now, there is no definable elbow and the shoulder doesn't really look like a shoulder as much as it does another part of the arm.
The torso is too long for the legs and arms, and should be shorter - alternatively, the arms and legs could be longer. The feet are too big and the differing angles make them (notably the one on the right) a little misshapen. The one on the left is bigger then the one on the right by a noticable amount.
Make your legs a little longer and do the same thing I suggested with arms - structure them around the hip, knee and heel. The rest should fall into place.
The hands are weird and the fingers are a little too big.
The back arm is not defined enough for the positioning that you want - instead of looking like it's going back and resting on his hip, it looks like it's a weird shortened blob. There are also issues with your other arm, though these are more minor, and mostly deal with the hand and elbow areas.
Structure arms based on the shoulder, elbow and hand - from there, if you have a proper understanding of those, the arms themselves should fall into place. As of now, there is no definable elbow and the shoulder doesn't really look like a shoulder as much as it does another part of the arm.
The torso is too long for the legs and arms, and should be shorter - alternatively, the arms and legs could be longer. The feet are too big and the differing angles make them (notably the one on the right) a little misshapen. The one on the left is bigger then the one on the right by a noticable amount.
Make your legs a little longer and do the same thing I suggested with arms - structure them around the hip, knee and heel. The rest should fall into place.
The hands are weird and the fingers are a little too big.