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Ok, um, I apologize for calling you out, I guess? I didn't want to start a debate or anything. But just opening the file again and seeing the capitals there motivates me so much more to want to read it. Sorry if I acted like an ass, not my intention. But the capitals seriously do help the presentation of a story, and makes it less tiring to read.

I'll edit this post with my thoughts when I'm done reading. Again, sorry if it bothered you. But I do believe it's for the best.

EDIT: Cool stuff. It may or may not be intentional, but you know when to drag on and when not to do it, and I'm legitimately thrilled.

Punctuation and whatnot were used correctly, but there were certain words that were spelled "incorrectly" as a way of bringing you to a better POV with the character, I guess you could say.
Stylistic choices like that are used when it actually fits the moment. For example, I read a book once in which there was no punctuation or capitalization because the narrator was a five year-old girl. Internal monologues often disregard punctuation, spelling, etc. so you get more into the mind of a character. However, unjustified lack of capitals only help make the book more tiring to read. For example, if he had left the e-mail without capitals, or only the character's thoughts were uncapitalized, then it would have made lot of sense, and would have been a great tool. But the whole text didn't have capitals, and that's not "style".
Keep reading, bookworm.
Someday the words will grow off your eyeballs.
Someday you will understand what it is you feel.
The poke of reality will strike like thunders in a tea cup.
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im gay - by GaryASPG - 11-25-2009, 04:38 PM
RE: im gay - by Whispy - 11-25-2009, 04:40 PM
RE: im gay - by GaryASPG - 11-25-2009, 04:41 PM
RE: im gay - by GrooveMan.exe - 11-25-2009, 04:43 PM
RE: im gay - by Alpha Six - 11-25-2009, 04:46 PM
RE: im gay - by GrooveMan.exe - 11-25-2009, 04:56 PM
RE: im gay - by Alpha Six - 11-25-2009, 05:11 PM
RE: im gay - by Father Christmas - 11-25-2009, 04:48 PM
RE: im gay - by GaryASPG - 11-25-2009, 04:59 PM
RE: im gay - by Vipershark - 11-25-2009, 05:20 PM
RE: im gay - by Baegal - 11-25-2009, 08:36 PM
RE: im gay - by Whispy - 11-25-2009, 05:34 PM
RE: im gay - by Rosencrantz - 11-25-2009, 06:35 PM
RE: im gay - by Rökkan - 11-25-2009, 08:02 PM
RE: im gay - by Vipershark - 11-25-2009, 08:08 PM
RE: im gay - by Stooben - 11-25-2009, 08:12 PM
RE: im gay - by Chris2Balls [:B] - 11-28-2009, 09:15 AM
RE: im gay - by SpritingGod - 01-02-2010, 01:13 PM
RE: im gay - by Baegal - 01-02-2010, 01:53 PM
RE: im gay - by GrooveMan.exe - 01-02-2010, 02:23 PM

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