12-06-2009, 12:25 PM
uh
well, I definitely got a metrosexual vibe from that chapter
it wasn't badly written, but it felt a little TOO focused on clothes.
Almost as if the Riot Squad themselves were talking about clothes a bit too much.
Other than that, there were maybe one or two spelling/grammar mistakes that I saw.
Keep going, though.
well, I definitely got a metrosexual vibe from that chapter
it wasn't badly written, but it felt a little TOO focused on clothes.
Almost as if the Riot Squad themselves were talking about clothes a bit too much.
Other than that, there were maybe one or two spelling/grammar mistakes that I saw.
Keep going, though.
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