(02-19-2010, 06:28 PM)RECKENEFIN Wrote: Luigi, his dark-side alter ego Mr. L., and an over-cowardly version of himself whom Mr. L. later dubs "Squeegee" (Squeamish Luigi).stopped reading here
i have a problem with this part
typically if someone is split into three parts of them self, they actually split into 3 parts of them self
it doesnt mean the normal version stays intact and the good and evil sides just fucking poof into existence
it should be a good luigi, a melancholic or just straight up emotionless luigi, and an evil luigi
but yeah
back to reading i'll comment more on the rest in a second
also this story is boring and uninspired
your lack of an explanation on how dimentio is suddenly undead is just about as stupid as your lack of an explanation of how luigi just spawns two more versions of himself
just got to the screenshots
the mixed bittages, mixed art types/styles are making this hard to look at
also the overworld maps are incredibly tiled and boring looking
and the names of your 'worlds' give off a feel of "been there, done that. in every mario game ever"
come up with something original
everything in that post feels boring and uninspired