09-08-2008, 08:33 PM
Much darker then usual. I did like the idea, and most of how it was written. It did seem to feel almost dictionary/etc at times and felt a little over enthusiastic.
Post some more and then I can give more of what I think of the story as its kind of held back here and the reader isn't really sure whats going on. I do like the character development.
Post some more and then I can give more of what I think of the story as its kind of held back here and the reader isn't really sure whats going on. I do like the character development.
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