Metal Sprite (Comic Series)

[Drinks]

The problem with being constructive with sprite comics is normally there are 3 major things you can judge it on.
Art
Story
Originality

You didn't draw it, so we can't judge the art, we can't judge it on originality because the theme has been done to death and you are using characters that aren't yours.

Which leaves story, which is weak and already has plotholes, the mood of the comic isn't clear as it's constantly going between action and comedy.