MushHog's Super Mario Fan Fiction

[Baegal]

the thing that bothers me the most is that it's more like a documentary, where you're just stating everything that happens, which kind of leaves the story lifeless. Another major thing is that tying a bunch of characters (even if from the same series) into one thing as if everybody knew each other in the first place. Rosalina, for example, was what I call a "one time" character, where they usually don't make reappearances, and usually shouldn't, because they really only work in their game and sound awkward in other games, unlike luigi, peach, toads, and bowser (grodus, cackletta, mario's partners in paper mario games, etc.)