02-12-2011, 05:36 AM
I think there was enough there.
But it seems unfocused: the tone suddenly shifts from chill, just taking a dump --> OH GOD WAT
i think it needs something like a "cling," hmm how do I say this.. Like if he tried reaching below, and something swatted his arm away, and he thought it was a rat.
But it seems unfocused: the tone suddenly shifts from chill, just taking a dump --> OH GOD WAT
i think it needs something like a "cling," hmm how do I say this.. Like if he tried reaching below, and something swatted his arm away, and he thought it was a rat.
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