Story: A Squires Ambition. [Writing]

[GrooveMan.exe]

I don't think that's a good idea. In good writing, your own understanding of grammar and other technical understandings of English is required, before you can bust out all the creative stuff. I reccomend you go through that passage again yourself, reading it out loud (Reading it to someone else; or having them read it out to you is even better!), finding the grammatical mistakes and the awkward sentences.

As for the passage of text itself - as said already it's marred with technical errors. Attention needs to be paid to the use of "man's", both how and where it comes up.
While it's okay for a prose to start in medias res - just jumping into the action without prior exposition - it means the action needs to imply some exposition. The interaction of these two characters says... almost nothing about them. We know one is a Lowly Squire, and we know there's an angry, shirtless knight and... nothing else. Why are they on the plains? Why does the knight hate the squire? The opening line implies that the plain is often a field of battle, but there are only two people here; is there a war going on?

That initial line of dialogue is very ambiguous, since it's attributed to a 'he'. That line comes close to giving characterisation or context, but it doesnt go very far.