[Sprite Comic] Pokemon The Commercial

[Proton]

Can you at least read the comic first and give hardcore crushing REAL criticism FROM YOU.

Your comic is the biggest piece of shit to ever hit the internet like a raining bag of heavy shit.

Initially, the title made it sound like some sort of advertisement for Pokemon.
Then your first comment made it sound like some generic-as-fuck fantasy novel.

Then I clicked the link.

The fuck.


It's like the horribly disgusting default tiles of RPG Maker, with lacklustre RPG sprites on them.

And then what happened? You threw in Pokemon sprites,
that
look
entirely different from the other parts.

Even the red borders are out of place as fuck.


It's also boring.
It's got no action poses, it's got no variety in positions,

as,
it's not a comedy Sunday comic strip that gets away with simplicity due to punchlines being delivered in 3 panels.

You're obviously going for a serious comic,
don't slack your way through it.


The font is ugly, along with you seeming to have barely any knowledge of punctuation and grammar.
So yeah, it looks like a pile of garbage.

I guess I'll just go by the story. Maybe it's oka-
nope.



It's called Kingdom and Coins.
There's one coin and it's barely a focal point.
And it's a Mario Coin.

Your pacing is absolute garbage, you go from trying to make an intro for one person to another with a cliffhanger, which is terrible.
There's no build up,
there's no development,
there's not even a sense of addiction.

How could anyone ever be entwined in your story if this is how you make an issue?