That's barely any better. It still has no real pose, and, while the shading is a little better, it still has no defined lightsource.
EDIT: Even with that edit, it's STILL not any better. I recommend you look at Sudowoodo for reference, since they are basically the same thing.
EDIT: Even with that edit, it's STILL not any better. I recommend you look at Sudowoodo for reference, since they are basically the same thing.