05-18-2016, 03:43 AM
Because I'm aware you tend to take words too seriously, I'll preface this post by saying that what I'm about to give you is *constructive criticism*. It is *in no way* a judgement of your character or personality, but a few helpful tips to aid you in creative writing. I really hope you understand and know that I mean no hard feelings.
Proper nouns are being used way too often. Normally, I start a paragraph using someone's name and use pronouns (he/she/etc.) for the rest of the paragraph or session of dialogue. There are certain conditions under which you can use names to refer to the characters involved - if they're both the same gender, etc.
That's all I really have to give. This traditional storytelling format you're using is far easier to read and takes up less space than the script format you used before.
Proper nouns are being used way too often. Normally, I start a paragraph using someone's name and use pronouns (he/she/etc.) for the rest of the paragraph or session of dialogue. There are certain conditions under which you can use names to refer to the characters involved - if they're both the same gender, etc.
That's all I really have to give. This traditional storytelling format you're using is far easier to read and takes up less space than the script format you used before.
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