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Super Smash Origins: Birth Of Cream (Fanfiction)
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05-21-2016, 10:02 AM (This post was last modified: 05-26-2016, 02:09 PM by Kosheh.)
oh.

this format is actually a lot better than the script-based storytelling. nice job!! [Image: w17P6fT.gif]

I'm with PK though - you keep jumping between past and present tense.
Either the events in the story HAVE ALREADY HAPPENED,
or the events in the story ARE CURRENTLY HAPPENING

(05-17-2016, 11:13 PM)Harold_Roxby Wrote:
And as Boogeyman Spots Vanilla trying to attack Vanilla sprays Boogeyman's mouth with one weakness, foam spray of Cheese.

This is the strangest sentence I've ever read in a fanfiction. Did Vanilla just fight off the boogeyman using cheese out of a spray can?
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RE: Super Smash Origins: Birth Of Cream (Fanfiction) - by Kosheh - 05-21-2016, 10:02 AM

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