02-25-2009, 10:06 PM
"Game Hunter, smooth in sound, but strikes without notice, leaving its weak prey to stagger,"
and the three last lines don't have the right rythm.
Good poem, a cliché, but still good.
and the three last lines don't have the right rythm.
Good poem, a cliché, but still good.
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