09-13-2016, 09:42 AM
Karate Joe provided a sizable amount of well-needed critique for me over on DK Vine, so I'll be keeping myself busy for the rest of today (and possibly tomorrow) following all that.
Until I get those adjustments in order, here's a small update to chew over.
Karate Joe Wrote:Sorry for the absence, I forgot there was a new sheet on the last page. I'll start there.
The wing's looking a lot more fitting next to the other one. The only additional change I'd make is to have the second feather from the top be a bit more jagged. It's the only feather with 4 corners while the others have 3, if that makes sense.
Goombario's hat looks good, I would just change the line of the cap portion of the hat so that it looks like it curves down onto the line of his body. Great work on the shape of the rim though. For the back of the hat, I think the rim can be shortened just a bit.
The palette of the lonely Goomba is really nice, and the alternate heads look good. At a glance they might be a little taller than the regular ones, but I don't know if that's the intention. I prefer B for the side head, since I think Goombas are usually bilaterally symmetrical.
Goombario's new outline color could be made a little darker. Between the hands, B looks really nice, but the outline thickness difference between the finger and the front of the fist might need to be made a little more gradual. The red tongue is my favorite of the three.
For the hands, the only one that looks off to me is the last one on the second row. The way the third finger connects to the base of the hand makes it look like there's only three fingers, so maybe make connection between finger and the hand just slightly indented, or you could try adding a fourth finger into the perspective. The rest of the hands look really great though, awesome work on those.
Until I get those adjustments in order, here's a small update to chew over.