(Issue 208!) JournalistMan.exe

[GrooveMan.exe]

New Edition!

http://img337.imageshack.us/img337/4764/issue207.jpg

Because of some really stressful time constraints, this wasn't as great as I'd hoped. It was to be 5 features instead of 4, and a greater integration of your opinions. Guycott lucked out here - I hope you don't mind me using a (neatened version) of your submission.

[triptych]

[5:22:59 PM] Mr. Shyflower: what's not to NO MORE HEROES 2




great issue

[Kitsu]

4 things that need to be included in more games...

looks at 5 of his favourites

I suppose that was just a simple typo, right? Or is there a secret fifth thing, and we have to go through the magazine with a fine-tooth comb to find it?

Nice writing, though.

[GrooveMan.exe]

ARG that's such an obvious oversight. This is why I run my editions past you guys before we go to print - they never proofread my work. D= And before anyone else says anything, I am aware of the "gammes" typo in the Soundtracks paragraph. =c

Edit: Sploder, there WAS meant to be 5, and the last one was cut due to time and space constrain- UH I MEAN

IT'S A REFERENCE TO IMPLY THAT MY 5TH THING IS THAT MORE GAMES SHOULD HAVE HIDDEN CONTENT. YES.

This issue really does have shitty production quality. I'm so sorry.

[Rosencrantz]

you should mention that

in fine print underneath the article



provided they allow you to use fine print

[GrooveMan.exe]

Naw, naw. I can go back to the offices tomorrow and put right what one went wrong. I should just be better at noticing things like that.

[Rosencrantz]

well, I can help with some hardxXxcore proofreading if you're going to fix up your article~



4 things that need to be included in more games...:
1) Customisation (should probably be spelled "Customization")
"...customised..." --- shouldn't it be "customized"?

3) Local Multiplayer
"But now consoles have integrated internet, a lot of games publishers..." --- should probably be "But now that consoles have integrated internet, a lot of game publishers..."
"...and has it's place..." --- and has it is place

Blur:
"All the real world locations and cars to please the realistic racing enthusiast,..." --- fragment :C
"With both local and online multiplayer, what's not to" --- cut off

NMH2: Deadly Struggle
"...with a beam-katana; once the #1 Ranked assassin in the US until he retired to watch anime and wrestling DVDs" --- this is just awkward to me :/ Maybe get rid of the semicolon and switch in "who was" ?

Sin and Punishment
"...nonesnsical plot..." --- small typo

Fist of the North Star
"...Fist of the North Star..." --- italics problem

"The transition to 3Dhas..." --- 3Dhas

"...ecellently..."
"...persuade you to give it wa watch..." --- small typos here too

"...rediculous opening." --- shouldn't it be "ridiculous"?



And this is all I'm seeing that you should look into fixing. I've noticed a few semicolons here and there that could easily be removed, but they're probably just as fine where they are now

[GrooveMan.exe]

No, because I'm english, Customisation has an 's'.

All the rest is valid, though.

[Rosencrantz]

No, because I'm english, Customisation has an 's'.

Oh

I was just going with Firefox's automatic spell-checker :/

I'm guessing this also applies to Rediculous, right?

[GrooveMan.exe]

That might just be me being dumb, unfortunately.

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Man, I go back to the offices to fix it, and they've actually fixed everything for me!

THE VERY NERVE

But I still tweaked it anyway; and made a few sentences smother. This is pretty much the finished version.
http://img411.imageshack.us/img411/4764/issue207.jpg

[GrooveMan.exe]

OH SHIT GUYS RETRO ISSUE

I found that the beta layout for Issue 202 was still on our servers. Now you get to see what the formatting of the page was like before I became editor, and what's possibly my most favourite article...

http://img686.imageshack.us/img686/8382/issue202.jpg

Holy shit the editor before me sucked.

[GrooveMan.exe]

http://img204.imageshack.us/img204/186/issue208.jpg

GOGOGOGOGOGOGO-man is this page wordy.