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Bike guy tries to steal old lady's dentures..Who does that?
That was a horrible and random attempt at being funny.
And don't say "sorry. you're wrong" too because it's true. There's nothing good about this, the 2nd page with the horrible humor already proves it's bad, and it's gonna continue to be bad. And 1up is right, you can't tell people to leave and come back when the story's progressed, that already shows you failed at trying to make it interesting in the first place. Not trying to offensive here, but this comic has a horrible start.
Also, if this is gonna be a story...DON'T MAKE IT 4 PANELS.
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You're right. I'm a total prick and I should just leave.
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right because that's totally what we were hinting at
i love when people think "WORK ON THIS IT SUCKS" means "I HATE YOU GET THE FUCK OUT"
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I wasn't serious. >>; I am however a prick, and I shouldn't have told him to leave.
Don't assume I won't get better though. If my comic sucks I'm gonna try to improve.
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seriously I don't think you can fix that
just start over
get a GOOD first page that will draw people in, and not "aah what a good day in pokemon land what will i do today oh no bad guys time to save the world"
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See Vipershark, here's why your advice is actually, pretty damn terrible.
If he starts again, logically speaking it will be the same level of quality and wont draw anyone in. If, however, he workd on this comic until it's upto a suitable standard and people actually like how it's been made, he can take what he's learned and apply it to an original, more well written story, yes?
No point making something new if you dont know how.
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That's not what I'm saying.
Use the same story. But re-do it so that it actually works, you know? That way it's good all the way through, and will have more of a chance of keeping an audience up until the same point that a terrible beginning but good ending would.
If you understand that.
tl;dr keep the comic good all the way through and more people will keep reading it instead of having some of your audience stop reading because of a crappy start
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01-02-2009, 09:38 PM
(This post was last modified: 01-02-2009, 09:39 PM by yoh001.)
No need for flaming the guy...
If you think the first comic is bad, give reasons why. Without insults. I see in the previous post someone gave him some tips. That's good.
The comic's not THAT bad to me, but yes, it could use some improvement. And that will be done in the future issues I suppose.
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If you stay around, you'll learn that our crit is pretty much always harsh but true.
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I see.
I'll keep that in mind then.
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(01-02-2009, 09:46 PM)Vipershark Wrote: If you stay around, you'll learn that our crit is pretty much always harsh but true.
I remember when people didnt actually have to be dicks to get the point across, but y'know, apparently doing that again wont work...
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