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11-23-2009, 02:53 AM
(This post was last modified: 11-23-2009, 02:53 AM by Stooben.)
Haha, thanks for fixing my typo.
The claw itself seems to be a little too thick. And the front of the kart looks a little odd. Notice how the screenshot shows the front of the cargo arching up, then back down slightly? This needs to be done. The headlight (or whatever that thing is) needs to be extended out a few pixels past that point. Additionally, the railing seems a little too tall.
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11-23-2009, 03:01 AM
(This post was last modified: 11-23-2009, 03:02 AM by zwb147.)
Changes made: Made the headlight arch over the front, lowered railing,made the front of the Cargo arch only slightly.
Does the headlight need to extend further out also?
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The headlight looks good. The claw (not the pink hook, that part was fine; I'm talking about the dark part) looks a little too thick still, in comparison to how skinny it looks in the screenshot. The shading on the kart's body seems to drop off too fast, rather than smoothly blending in with it. The railing should be extended outwards so that it ends right where the front of the kart arches up.
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Added more railing, fixed shading, Skinnied the hook, and thats it.
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Looks right to me. Good job.
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I will make more tomorrow!
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Cool.
By the way, (this is just my opinion) the pipe kart might be a good one to tackle next.
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11-23-2009, 03:16 PM
(This post was last modified: 11-23-2009, 03:17 PM by zwb147.)
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Here is the first try. Just ignore the handle in between the two pipes. I'm changing all Double Dash Karts so that they can be used by only one person. I think the size of the kart was too big, but now it is ok.
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11-23-2009, 03:51 PM
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the shading on the pipe isn't round enough. The wheels should also be bigger, and be more under the pipe, because its ellevated off ground. Also, the bigger pipe's top lineart looks too angular.
IMO, for the wario kart, the shading by the claw should round up until under the claw, because it should give a cast shadow.
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It also needs the bumper in the front and the seat railing. And remember when you make the wheels larger to keep the hubcaps fairly small on this kart.
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How's This?
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A little better, but still not real impressive. The main problem seems to be the shape and shading of the pipes. Take a look at
this. Now, you don't need to copy those pipes' designs pixel for pixel, but try to use them as a rough guide as to what they should look like on the kart.
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Thanks for the reference!
Before I start shading, I want your opinion about the actual shape. Is it Good Now?
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Much better. Maybe just make the rims on the pipes a few pixels shorter.