Super Smash Bros. Clash

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Somebody must be enjoying these.

Well there's also people out there enjoying... something I won't mention here as it's not appropriate.
Finding people enjoying something doesn't mean it's good or that people on this forum here will like it. Most of us have higher standards than your average 0815 fanfiction - that's why they're here and not elsewhere!

Little tip for making your own story with original characters and plot: start small. Don't try to make anything huge and epic on your first try. It won't work out. People should also be able to help more on specific aspects that way.

[Gors]

Well, I gave my two cents. If you're hellbent on continuing this, feel free. I'm just saying that almost no one in tSR will read your text.

[Makermatic21]

It's still kind of nice to see someone making a story like this and not totally flip out because people are expressing their dislike for it. It's pretty refreshing, and I can tell you're a pretty likeable guy just because of this c:

Though, sadly, fanfics are pretty much the lowest forms of creative writing. Then you put this in a script style, which is extremely hard to do effectively despite looking so simple.

TO BE COMPLETELY FAIR, THOUGH, I shouldn't tell you to stop writing fanfiction altogether; in fact, writing fanfiction is actually a really good way to develop really important creative skills that you would need in real-world scenarios, since you're essentially making paracosms. However, you would probably be better off creating more original tales with original settings, original characters, and various other original things that would really help you flex your mind more. Fanfictions admittedly have constraints for you to work around, and being able to work around constraints is a really important ability to possess, though doing more original works will help you develop your own constraints - and therefore teach yourself to predict constraints through defining what you think SHOULD be constraints (also important in real life).

It just wouldn't be too good to try and present them in a serious manner, though, since people tend to not take them seriously

What's up Rosencrantz? Okay your next:

Where to begin? First I'd like to thank you for your words of encouragement. So far you were the first person to step up and actually try to help and offer advice for my work; instead of just telling me I suck and offering no valid reasoning. Thank you.

Um you are right. It's been very difficult for me to put this into a script form. I had to do many writes and rewrites before finding a decent flow. At one time I had 5 journals of the same story written several different ways. It's been close to 12 years before I even decided to put my work on the internet; you guys being my first choice because I just love this site! You guys are the first to see my work from various journals now converted into a single piece of work. Hoo-ray for you!!!

I agree with you about being original. I just didn't think my original works were good enough yet to share and so I wanted something already established to share first to see how it goes over. Though not as good as I had hoped; I still will share with you all my original pieces of work since you all seem to want to see them so badly.

Okay as far as being too serious. I tend to be very serious about things I'm passoniate about. Like I said I love Nintendo's characters and want to do them right. It's very important to me. They've helped make me who I am today in many ways and have brought countless years of entertainment and perhaps even knowledge. As a gamer I feel I owe those characters; at least their creators, whom we can never truly pay back. But hey at least we can try by writing crappy fanfictions about them and posting it all over tsr Right? lol. Anyway even though I take this stuff seriously it's only because of passion; and because while there are a million of these types stories they are all comedies and meant to be stupid. I love comedy as much as the next guy, but can't we have at least one or two serious, well-thought out, well planned, intelligent, decent stories? That's where I come in. Same with flash movies. Great animation. Sucky plots. Why can't you have both elements with a few comedic moments to keep things light-hearted? Maybe I should inject more humor, I dunno. Sorry I rambled...

[triptych]

You are right.

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There are numerous amounts of Nintendo fanfics out there

gonna

and with good reason:

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[Makermatic21]

I suggest avoiding nintendo fanfics altogether

This. Nobody ever became a successful author by writing a terrible piece of fanfictio-



Well shit.

Funny.

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Well, I gave my two cents. If you're hellbent on continuing this, feel free. I'm just saying that almost no one in tSR will read your text.

Thanks for sharing.

[Previous]

You can actually quote multiple post at a time... or you could just not quote at all and just write down who you're addressing. Don't make multiple posts when you can avoid it.

Moreover, no need to try to justify yourself, just do better next time.

[Makermatic21]

Instead of taking the easy way out and simply calling your work out and being a dick like the others,
I'm going to be constructive. Well to be honest this whole story isn't that bad I mean you tried with this one and that's really what matters.
If you enjoy doing it by all means keep doin' your thing.  But well there are some areas which I felt I should give feedback upon which I should let you know. 

Spoiler

In the beginning you kind of delve too deep into the Mario universe that I was confused as to why it was titled what it was, then it seemed way to rushed and weird when all the Metroid and Earthbound enemies showed up. So I suggest you start it with something other than just Mario and Luigi getting a letter. Plus a party being wrecked by Bowser seems so typical in this story making the reader feel like "ugh this shit again" (much like Team Rocket started becoming) I feel Bowser shouldn't be directly the cause to the subspace opening up alone though he should be part of a bigger plan involving all the villains in each universe. The fact that Mario gets kidnapped by some mini-Mario's makes it weird when the other enemies show up making it seem monotonous as if you have a mess of enemies just going on. I feel you could pull this concept of the mini-Mario's off if it all comes together in the end, since your current point of the story seems loose as if it's all improvised directed plot, though I do understand how it usually goes like this in the beginning of a story, and I have a feeling it feels like this since you may have something bigger planned. My biggest complain though is the fact that you chose to make Mario, Luigi and even Yoshi's speech inaudible to the reader yet not to the characters. Now this concept works for the games yet not for a dialogue based script, it would even work for a narrative, but it gets annoying in script since you basically have a silent character on stage who's not even saying anything but exclamations, I do understand Yoshi though but by now you have too many mumbling characters that you might as well not include him. So I do think you should change that. Also a big complaint I feel as through whether it should be a narrative instead of a script since by chapter 3 you have so many inaudible characters DK and Diddy and Luigi still mumbling to the point where he just sounds like a retard. You say to disregard the small details but in cases like this we need them to see what the hell is going on. Towards the end though I feel the story is getting monotonous as now we have all these silent characters and everything seems like its copied from a videogame and pasted onto the story and it becomes predictable you should never make your stories travel in a pattern because that's usually what bores people is predictability. I imagine Samus would team up with them now at this point, and it would keep going like that til they have enough people show up and beat Bowser. With the whole thing involving Mario's universe and Zelda suddenly caring to help. I feel as if Peach shouldn't be the bearer of bad news in this unknown land and suddenly convincing them their in danger when it hasn't been presented. It's weird how upon arrival they get to Link then Zelda and now everyone's  back at E. Gadd's like its some kind of a reunion.

Try reworking the plot and it's element take what I said and work with it. Think of these as drafts to the actual story, write a big plot down, and how it would go through then put the whole thing down right. If anything try putting this as a comic if you can't draw try sprite comic if you're not skilled enough to make it eye-popping, work on your writing to make it more vivid and less fluid since right now your story feels like water, watching a bland stream trying to see where it goes and it just keeps coming back to the same point.

Hi El Loco':
Okay I can see your point about it being a little rushed and being out context a little bit. Here's what happened. I started the plot off like a typical Mario game because I wanted a sense of familiarity. Than once the reader feels safe, WHAM! They are plunged into an unexpected adventure. Why? To make you feel more like the heroes. They weren't expecting the ordinary to become extraordinary and neither were you. Now keep in mind that Mario has no change in his stories. Usually it is the "same shit, different day" for our plucky plumber so you know... Oh and lastly I don't know if you were aware of this or not buy my story goes in the order of adventure mode in SSBM, so that's why we begin with Mario's world. Plus who else would untie all other heroes in the Nintendo universe, but Mario? We witnessed that in Brawl. And Mario is my favorite so... yeah!

Keep reading. Bowser isn't the main villan. He just believes he is, but much like in Brawl he's part of a grander design.

I do have bigger plans, but what? Read on. The mini-marios were a reference to the Mario 128 event in melee. Orignally they were going to be Marios from another dimension, possibly Subspace, who were controlled by a higher form to do bad. Think of Game and watch's role in Brawl. Sort of like that. I might change them to the myte enemies though from Subspace.

The inaudiable speech thing is supposed to be like the games. Whenever Mario and Luigi talk in the Superstar Saga series all you the player hears is jibberish. But the other characters in that world seem to understand them perfectly. For this part use your imagination and picture them talking from the Superstar Saga series and you'll feel more at home. Um the other characters never talked in Subspace emissary either and yet people still make that out to be a master piece. If that story were posted on these boards as a fan fic you guys would hate that too. So if Nintendo can tell a story with characters who don't say more than 2 words the whole time I feel I should be able to do that too sticking to that formula that Nintendo provieded for us gamers/fanfiction writers.

Um spolier alert:
My comix suck! Suck Hard!

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Somebody must be enjoying these.

Well there's also people out there enjoying... something I won't mention here as it's not appropriate.
Finding people enjoying something doesn't mean it's good or that people on this forum here will like it. Most of us have higher standards than your average 0815 fanfiction - that's why they're here and not elsewhere!

Little tip for making your own story with original characters and plot: start small. Don't try to make anything huge and epic on your first try. It won't work out. People should also be able to help more on specific aspects that way.

Okay. Thank you for your advice.

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You can actually quote multiple post at a time... or you could just not quote at all and just write down who you're addressing. Don't make multiple posts when you can avoid it.

Moreover, no need to try to justify yourself, just do better next time.

Got ya! Well I'm off for now, but willo return with the next part tomorrow. Until than...

[Crappy Blue Luigi]

But hey at least we can try by writing crappy fanfictions about them and posting it all over tsr Right? lol.

please don't

[Sevenstitch]

if Nintendo can tell a story with characters who don't say more than 2 words the whole time I feel I should be able to do that too sticking to that formula that Nintendo provieded for us gamers/fanfiction writers.

The entire reason the "silent protaganist" bit works in video games is that they are video games. You can't tell what a character is doing, thinking, or saying in written word if they never talk.

I'm not really sure why you are keeping this up here, honestly. To be blunt, I can't see why you aren't taking the giant obvious hint: No one here wants to read this stuff, whether it is good
or not. While Fan-fiction certainly falls into the "Creative" part of this forum, and Fan-fiction isn't against forum rules, it should be quite clear by now that the majority of this forum has a
rather large distaste for them.

I'm not saying you should stop writing. I'm not saying you should stop writing Fan-Fiction. I am suggesting that this particular forum is not the proper venue in which to showcase your
Fan-fiction. Don't stop coming around, don't stop posting, don't get angry. There are plenty of other things to be a part of here aside from this.

[Rosencrantz]

What's up Rosencrantz? Okay your next:

Where to begin? First I'd like to thank you for your words of encouragement. So far you were the first person to step up and actually try to help and offer advice for my work; instead of just telling me I suck and offering no valid reasoning. Thank you.

Um you are right. It's been very difficult for me to put this into a script form. I had to do many writes and rewrites before finding a decent flow. At one time I had 5 journals of the same story written several different ways. It's been close to 12 years before I even decided to put my work on the internet; you guys being my first choice because I just love this site! You guys are the first to see my work from various journals now converted into a single piece of work. Hoo-ray for you!!!

I agree with you about being original. I just didn't think my original works were good enough yet to share and so I wanted something already established to share first to see how it goes over. Though not as good as I had hoped; I still will share with you all my original pieces of work since you all seem to want to see them so badly.

Okay as far as being too serious. I tend to be very serious about things I'm passoniate about. Like I said I love Nintendo's characters and want to do them right. It's very important to me. They've helped make me who I am today in many ways and have brought countless years of entertainment and perhaps even knowledge. As a gamer I feel I owe those characters; at least their creators, whom we can never truly pay back. But hey at least we can try by writing crappy fanfictions about them and posting it all over tsr Right? lol. Anyway even though I take this stuff seriously it's only because of passion; and because while there are a million of these types stories they are all comedies and meant to be stupid. I love comedy as much as the next guy, but can't we have at least one or two serious, well-thought out, well planned, intelligent, decent stories? That's where I come in. Same with flash movies. Great animation. Sucky plots. Why can't you have both elements with a few comedic moments to keep things light-hearted? Maybe I should inject more humor, I dunno. Sorry I rambled...

It's no problem, I'm not usually an abrasive guy~

Anyhoo, I would recommend you try your best to avoid doing script style in the future unless you're truly and honestly comfortable with it. For starters, unless you're a playwright or something, it isn't a very viable form of literature as it usually can't portray action scenes as well as a normal paragraph-based story could. Stuff like Shakespeare's works are viable since there is usually very little consistent action in between dialogue (and usually the action are not important in a literary perspective; that's why a massive swordfight is condensed into a single sentence or two: they're included purely to spark interest in Shakespeare's plays and hardly mean anything to the themes presented by the characters). This is a Nintendo fanfic, with plenty of imaginable action and shenanigans in general. Script style can't cover all of that.

Believe me about the originals thing; people here are more likely to give you constructive criticism on a story that could be salvaged. Fanfics are seen in a poor light by most people (especially here), so they're more likely to tell you that it sucks and that you should never ever do a fanfic. You show off an original story instead, and then they'll pick things apart and help you properly characterize your characters, help you properly develop scenery and themes, and help you develop a better-flowing story structure. At the very least, you'd be showing off all of your story-writing abilities and people will be willing to point out what you'd need more working with, as opposed to just sticking to a fanfic where you can't show off much aside from being able to set up a scenery. As a parallel to what happens in the main spriting sections of the forum, we usually can't offer critique to people who just recolor or edit sprites (as they are piss-poor indicators of someone's capability to draw things). Fanfics are essentially the same as those recolors and edits.

And it's great that you want to show support for a company that helped shape who you are, and I love it when someone likes to try and deviate from norms and think outside the box, but trying to pass a fanfic off as a serious work tends to spell out bad things since, again, people wouldn't take it as seriously as you do. You could write the best damn story in the world; if it involves someone like Mario or Sonic or Pikachu or anything of that sort, people aren't going to take it seriously purely because of the inclusion of characters that would turn it into a fanfiction.

:F

[Makermatic21]

Hello everyone. As promised here is Chapter 5: The Mysterious Star Warriors. For those of you whom have expressed your negative feelings towards my works, turn back now. This is indeed the one you were warned about. This is the longest part of my whole story before we get to the very end. We are getting close, and I promise I will put up other works, but for now I do intend to see this to the end. That in mind for those of you who love Kirby read on. This will explain much about him. The info. covered here is from various games, cartoons, books, and the crazy mind of yours truly. This is one of my favorites and I hope it is yours too. Here we go:

Chapter 5: The Mysterious Star Warriors


Suddenly an alram is heard.


Navi: Hey! What's that?.

Samus: An alarm indicating my ship is low on power. It's nothing we can return the GFHQ and refule… What the?(She's hitting some keys now.)

Peach: What is it Samus?

Samus: Something's seriously wrong with this control panel and we're heading into a nearby astroid belt!

Luigi: Oh no!

Peach: Eek!

Yoshi: Yoshi!

Samus: Everyone relax. I'll get us through this. (Using the best of her piloting skills Samus successfully navigates through an astroid belt. However a lone astroid still strikes her ship. Her ship is now plummeting.) Hold on! We're coming in for a landing. If I can just land on that nearby planet.

We now see her ship hit Pop Star. Her ship hit's the ground and is sliding acrossed the surface. It is in bad shape and starts to smoke. Suddenly we see the top hatch open and Samus leaps out doing a cool landing pose onto Popo Star's surface.Now everyone starts exiting the ship. Link Jumps out to the right saying "hep!" Zelda at the same time leaps out to the left going "yah!" Navi is than seen flying out. Yoshi dose his flutter jump to the left Peach parasols to safety on the right. Luigi leaps out yelling "Yay Hay!" DK is the last to leave the ship leaping high into the air and landing on the ground (like from the melee intro.) As all this is going on Samus is already surveying the area.


Samus: Stay close. We'll have to look around.

Our heroes travel for a little while until eventually they find Kirby's house. They peer inside, but no one is in there. than they hear a rustling noise. Navi flies up to a tree.


Navi: Hey. Hey look.

Peach: What is that?

Everyone looks up and Kirby is seen stuck in the tree. DK climbs up and grabs Kirby with one hand, while using the other to climb down to safety. DK sets Kirby down on the ground and pats him on the head. Kirby dose his hi taunt from the Smash series.


Kirby: Poio! Poio!

DK now confused scratches his head. Kirby walks over to the parasol and hands it to DK. He's making cute Kirby noises.

Zelda: hm. I do believe this creature is trying to communicate.

Just than Kirby sucks DK into his mouth. Than Yoshi, exclaiming, "Yoshi"!, sticks out his tounge and swallows up Kirby.

Peach: Yoshi. Let that poor creature go.

Yoshi burps and lets out an egg. The egg hatches and Kirby spits out DK.

Zelda: Look at that! The creature looks just like…

Kirby is beating his chest and making monkey noises. He runs up the nearest tree and runs acrossed the branches. One snaps.

Peach:Oh no!

Zelda: Look out!

Kirby falls from the tree landing on top of DK's head. DK is knocked out with banana birds chirping around his head. He shakes it off. Now he's angry! He yells angrily and grabs Kirby. While holding Kirby in one hand he winds up the other. Dk looks as though he's about to strike but Samus, who started a small charge beam, aims her arm cannon at DK.


Samus:…Unhand… the… creature.

Samus's tone of voice is so intimidating and serious DK immediately drops Kirby out of fear. Samus turns her back. DK Growls furiously. Samus turns back around. DK is silent. Samus turns around DK bares his teeth in an angry fashion. It's obvious DK won't let this go.


Peach:So Samus what do we do now?

Samus: According to our coordinates it would be the best course of action to…

We see DK staring at Kirby. He Smacks Kirby in the back of the head.


Yoshi: Yoshi!

Everyone turns around. DK is holding Kirby Smacking him.

Navi: Hey! Listen! You shouldn't do that! Hey! HEY!

Zelda: Unhand him you brute!

Samus is charging up her beam again. Kirby wiggles free. He kicks DK in the Stomach. Kirby dose rapid punches to DK's stomach.

Kirby: Pewpewpew!

Kirby now stomps on DK's head. As the ape tries to stand Kirby is winding up his one fist. He hits DK with a windup punch to the chest ( It would be DK's jaw if Kirby wasn't so small) and sends DK flying backward into a tree. DK hits his head and is out cold.

Peach: Oh my!

Zelda: humph! Serves the big ape right!

Samus watches for a moment not saying anything. She scans Kirby for her log book. The following information is displayed: Organism appears seemingly weightless and is composed of elastic-like qualities. When threatened organisim replicates the abilities of the threatening predator for a short period of time and uses those abilities as a defense mechanism. When the opposing threat has been neutralized organism returns to its former state.

Peach: Hey Samus. Uhm what are you doing?

Samus: Researching. We're currently located on a planet known as Pop Star. Based on what we've just witnessed I believe my hypothisis was correct. Not only dose this creature copy the look of an opponent but it absorbs and emulates their skills as well.

Peach: Could that help us?

Zelda: An ability like that would surely prove useful to our cause, but how do we convince the creature to join us?

Everyone is looking at Kirby now. Kirby has a confuse look on his face. He than jumps up and snatches Luigi's hat.

Luigi: Hey!

Kirby laughs and runs away. Luigi starts running after him and a chase ensues. Kirby runs near DK. Luigi follows in pursuit as the two run circles around DK. DK is following their actions looking around and watching them until he becomes dizzy and falls into Luigi knocking him to the ground. Oof! Kirby now uses this distration to run off. DK and Luigi get up dizzied and dusts their self off. Than Luigi makes an angry face and gives chase. Luigi, after what eels like hours, catches up to Kirby. He swings his arms and misses. He pants, winded. Later we see him sneaking up on Kirby tiptoeing softly. Kirby looks at Luigi now. Luig turns his head pretending not to look at Kirby and starts whislting the Luigi's Mansion theme. Kirby turns and Luigi trys again. Kirby turns back and Luigi starts doing his multiple taunt from Super Smash Brothers Brawl. Kirby looks confused and turns around. He grabs Kirby and and yells Gott'cha! However Kirby wiggles free and runs again. Annoyed Luigi trys to jump on Kirby and misses. Luigi dose his " Aw Shucks" pose from the melee series and dusts himself off; giving Kirby the chance to jump on a warp star and take off. Samus now aims her arm cannon.

Peach: (runs over)Samus wait! We don't want to hurt it.

Samus: Everything's under control. I'm an expert shot.

Peach: But that's what I'm afraid of!

Samus offers no reply and instead shoots out a grappling beam at the warpstar and pulls it toward her. Kirby, losing his balance, falls off. Zelda catches Kirby. Luigi quick snatches his hat from Kirby's head. He dose his item obtained pose from Luigi's Mansion and than puts the hat back on. Luigi looks very happy and content. Just than a breeze blows and Luigi's hat off again. Luigi looks. He drops to his knees and starts crying.

Peach: Oh Luigi. Don't cry. We'll get it back.

Zelda: Peach there's something I don't understand. Why is Luigi so upset over a hat? It's not that fasionable.

Peach: Zelda you don't understand. That hat is more than a fasion statement. The hat is the source of all of Luigi's strength and abilities.

Samus: He relies on a hat for strength?

Peach: Not just strength. All of his abilities. You see Mario and Luigi have had their hats since they were born. At one time they were exiled from the Mushroom Kingdom when the evil Koopa clan invaded and conquered us. For Years their hats remained safe in the castle hidden away from Bowser and his followers by my grandmother. It was told in an ancient prophecy that one day two "Twins of Destinny" would return to our beloved kingdom and end Bowser's reign of terror once and for all. Than one day, while working on a leaky drain pipe in the Kingdom of Brook Land, Mario and Luigi accidentally discovered a warp which led them to my castle. Since their arrival time and again Mario and Luigi have always thwarted Bowser's evil schemes. That is why I believe Mario and Luigi to be the "Twins of Destany" the prophecy spoke of. If so we must recover Luigi's hat. It is the only way to protect my kingdom.

Zelda: I understand Peach. Samus we need to…

Samus: I got it. We'll retrieve the hat.

The heroes search until at last Navi finds the hat.

Navi: Up there. In that tree. Listen...

Meanwhile Kirby sees apples. He gets excited and runs up the tree. And snatches an apple. He wings it down and Yoshi eats it. Frustrated Kirby shakes the branch and tons of apples come piling down ontop of Yoshi.

Yoshi: Owowowow!

Kirby jumps down on the apples and begins eating. He doesn't notice the hat landing on the pile. Luigi runs over to grab the hat. Just than the tree's eyes flash open and reveals a face. It's Whispy. Whispy blows Luigi backwards.

Luigi: Woah!

Luigi, Kirby, Yoshi, and a barrage of apples crash into the others. Everyone falls down, except Samus who straifed avoiding everything because she's cool. Whispy sucks Luigi's hat into its mouth.


Peach: ( out stretching her hand) No!

Whispy sucks up all the apples into its mouth. It spits them back out. Our heroes are being pelted. Samus, who's had enough of this is charging up her charge beam.


Navi: Hey! Look.

We see Kirby dodging the apple assault and suck an apple up into his mouth. Her spits it back at whispy. Whispy is momentarily stunned, but recovers swiftly. Whispy looks angry, but so dose Kirby. A battle is inevitable. Try as he might with three various forms of attack Whispy is no match for Kirby. After Kirby wins he dose his up taunt from brawl. Than he dose his traditional victory dance from all the Kirby games. Everyone runs over to celebrate. A dazed and defeated Whispy spits out another apple. It whizes at Zelda who ducks and hits Luigi right in the face. Luigi sits up momentarily stunned with his hat hanging on his nose.

Peach: Luigi! Are you all right?

Luigi: speaks.


Noticing the hat, Luigi smiles and exclaims lucky! He puts on the hat and jumps up, almost as if he has been revitalized. He looks at Kirby and starts to smile. Bravo! Now he's clapping and everyone joins in very pleased with Kirby.

Zelda: Congradulations on getting your hat back Luigi.

Peach: Oh! The way that creature battled! He's so amazing!

Zelda: You may be right Peach. I don't think any of us would be safe right now without the little pink guy.

Samus: Let's not push it. The " little pink guy" was the cause of all this mess. Still… I must admit its skills for battling are quite inept. I never thought this creature could posses such abilities.

An uknown voice is head: Kirby posses many unique and strange abilities. His potential is seemingly endless. Even I do not know the extent of his powers. Everyone turns to look now. We see an over the shoulder view of...Meta Knight. Now a close up on him.

Zelda: And you are…?

Meta Knight: Oh please forgive me. I did not mean to intrude. We have not been properly introduced. You may call me…( he flings off his cape as Spanish music briefly plays) Meta Knight. Like your friend here I too am a Star Warrior.

Peach: A…Star Warrior?

Meta Knight: That is correct. You see we Star Warriors have been charged with the sacred task of establishing eternal peace through out the galaxy. We have done so since the beginning of time. Our daily duties involve us traveling from planet to planet to protect the meek and punish the vile. My journey has lead me here to seek out your current ally Kirby.

Zelda: Wait. Why Kirby?

Peach: Have you come to recruit him to be one of you guys?

Meta Knight: Not exactly. You see…

Samus: Hold it right there! I've heard of the many legends of the Star Warriors during my time spent in the Galatic Federation Academy and I know they were all wiped out of existence during a greast war. Who are you really?

Meta Knight: I've already told you I am the Star Warrior known as Meta Knight. I am not lying.

Zelda: Wait Samus said the Star Warriors were wiped out during war. How did you…

Meta Knight: I just barely escaped. You see Samus Your academy was only partly right. A good deal of my comrads were wiped out during a great war. But not all of us perished. There were survivors, such as myself and another who calls himself Geno, who went into hiding. We were not strong enough to combat such a great threat.

Peach: Geno? Mario and I once met a Geno.

Meta Knight: Yes. We Star Warriors are stationed in different areas of the galaxy to ensure the safety of all living beings. Geno was sent to watch over and protect the Mushroom Kingdom. I have heard all about you Princess Peach. (Peach looks shocked.) I know all about the legends of Hyrule as well Princess Zelda and Link. (They look stunned) It is safe to lower your guard Samus Aran. Do not be afraid for we Star Warriors know of your noble deeds the most. You and the Galactic Federation have done well in keeping the galaxy safe.

Samus: Okay. So you know who we are. Even if your story is true it still doesn't explain what you want with Kirby.

Meta Knight: (ignoring the heroes) Kirby, you may have felled Whispy. But how can you fare against the likes of … me, a " True Star Warrior?" The time has come Kirby! Embrace your destinany. FIGHT ME!

Peach: What?

Meta Knight throws Kirby a sword. Kirby looks at it.

Kirby: Poio?

Meta Knight: Do not stall.

Zelda: You intend to harm him don't you?

Meta Knight: Kirby! I challenge you to an honorable duel. We shall see who the real Star Warrior is.

Samus: ( aiming her cannon at Meta Knight) I'm not about to let that happen.

Peach: Samus is right. You call dueling a small child honorable? Why you are nothing but a big bully.

Yoshi: Yoshi!

Zelda: Leave him alone!

Meta Knight ignores the others and heads towards Kirby.

Samus: That's far enough! Stay away from Kirby! I won't warn you again!

Meta Knight: Do not tempt fate! I understand your confusion and desire to aid your new ally, but I assure you this is a fair contest. Kirby may still be very young, but he is more than capable of handling himself in combat. Look. Everyone turns to Kirby. Kirby grabs the sword instinctively and prepares to fight. It begins. Now Kirby COME!

Kirby must fight a boss battle against Meta Knight. In an epic clash of titans Kirby finally defeats Meta Knight.


Meta Knight: No... I've been bested. Still. I thought I was the chosen one…(Now we see everyone gathered around a victorious Kirby and a defeated Meta Knight.) Bravo Kirby. That's what I want to see! This was most impressive indeed.

Peach: It is? You mean you want Kirby to grow stronger?

Zelda: That's it. That was your true intention all along. That's why you challenged Kirby in the first place. You anticipated to lose didn't you? This wasn't about winning it was a simple test.

Meta Knight: Alas, the truth has been exposed. Everything has gone according to plan. It appears as though the child has grown since we last crossed paths.

Peach: Last crossed paths? You mean you and Kirby have…

Meta Knight: You are correct Princess. We have crossed paths on many occasions. Some more pleasant than others. Many times have we battled and each time I've been bested. You do not realize Kirby's true potential. He once successfully destroyed my entire ship and decimated much of my crew. We are lucky to still be standing.

Zelda: Kirby did that to you?

Peach: A whole ship? Wow Kirby is so amazing!

Samus: I don't believe it. As far as I can tell Kirby is a defensive creature and only attacks when provoked. You would have had to pose some form of threat for Kirby to respond in such a matter. I believe it was an act of self defense.

Meta Knight: You are correct bounty hunter. I did try to kill Kirby. (Everyone gasps!) But that was only my time spent in service to the King. I have since had a change of heart and have made it my sworn duty to protect young Kirby.

Peach: Protect Kirby! First you try to harm him and than you try to help him? Are you friend or foe?

Zelda: Peach is right what side are you on?

Meta Knight: Side? There is no side. I am Kirby's care taker and teacher. Nothing more. I am sworn to protect Kirby until he hones his skills properly and reaches his true potential. For some time now I have been keeping a close eye on Kirby as he grows making sure no harm shall befall him. I am to see he is properly trained to carry out such an important destinany. Though he is powerful he may not be prepared to handle what will happen in the future. The Star Warriors are in dire need of a strong leader to lead them toi ultimate victory. Despite a prophecy stating Kirby may indeed be that champion I believe such a responsibility can only lie upon my shoulders and mine alone. There can only be one true champion and leader of the star warriors and this child shouldn't be the one. One day I shall finally best Kirby in combat and prove my suporaity.

Zelda: So you let jealous pride get in the way of your true potential than? You speak of honor and nobility, but instead of trying to help Kirby alongside your fellow comrads you'd rather risk failing your duty and dooming us all for the sake of your ego. All because you can't except the fact that there are other heroes out there, such as Kiurby, who just might be better than you. I don't know if Kirby is the champion like the prophecy you mentioned , but I do know he saved all of us in our time of need. He'll fight for and support his friends to the bitter end. That, in my book, makes him our hero! You're a star warrior though. I'm sure you already know what it takes to be a real hero.

Peach: Yeah! Being tough doesn't make you a hero. It's your personal actions that define you as a person that makes you a hero. Helping others makes you a hero. You're no hero. You're a big bully.

Samus: The chozo knew of real honor.

Zelda: Come on Kirby. Everyone. Let's get out of here.

They walk away.

Meta Knight: Wait. Do not judge me so harshly until I've finished my tale. I've told you all I've changed my ways. Please grant me an opportunity for atonement. Let me explain to you all more of our past and what is to come… (The heroes come back and are now listening.) The prophecy, I speak of, states that one day our entire universe will face a cosmic crysis like none other. Whole worlds will be plunged into darkness and be destroyed. Though the remaining star warriors and gathered heroes will fight their hardest, there efforts will be in vain. Many will perish, yet all is not lost. Lo' a lone Star Warrior will rise. He shall rise up, star rod in hand and challenge this impending threat. Darkness shall be cast aside and light returned. All of known exsistance will be safe once more but… at a terrible cost. (Everyone looks at Meta Knight as he pauses.) The prophecy goes onto state that while the galaxy is in total peace for the time being the hero saccrifies his very life…

Samus: Your commander believed Kirby is that hero spoken of didn't he?

Meta Knight: He did. I am not so sure. I realize now Kirby is is not to be underestimated. He could be the key to ushering in a new era of peace in the galaxy. It is to early to tell if he is to become perhaps one of the greatest Star Warriors of all time like my commander believed. So in order to determine whether or not the prophecy was correct My commander decided to conduct a series of tests for Kirby.

Zelda: Tests? What sore of tests?

Meta Knight: During a great war Kirby was but a small baby destined to become felled in the invasion like so many of my former comrads. We star warriors were ordered to get the baby to safety. No harm was to befall the small child at all costs. Our commmander sensed something different about Kirby. This particular child was extraordinary. Could he be the one the prophecy spoke of? Our commander believed it to be so just by taking but a simple gaze at the child. He felt that one day Kirby would save us all from tyranny and warfare. But first Kirby had to survive. Our Commander gave us the order to place the small child on a ship and blast him off to the nearwest planet known as Pop Star. There Kirby could live in peace and grow strong until the one fateful day he may return to us to lead us into battle. Time has passed and the child has only learned a small fraction of his powers. Still even at his tender age he shows signs of growing stronger. He may be the one we were hoping for unless….

Zelda: Unless what?

Meta Knight: unless the prophecy is wrong and Kirby is not the one the prophecy spoke of. The fate of the Star Warriors resting in the hands of a mere child is ludacris. My commander may have believed in such a notion, but I do not. Although I am Kirby's mentor I will not hesitate to finish him if he shows any kind iof weakness. It was my commander's dying wish that I may look after the child and so I'll honor my promise. However I will not jeperdize the fate of My fellow Star Warriors and the galaxy because it is stated that a mere child will save us all. The prophecy must be wrong.

Zelda: I disagree!

Peach: Yeah Kirby is that hero! I just know we'll save the galaxzy and my kingdom.

Zelda: With his special abilities added to our team there's little we can't do.

Meta Knight: No! Kirby goes nowhere. I am afterall still his caretaker. He shall remain here and grow stronger. I have a promise to keep.

Zelda: Hey Kirby bested you in battle and aided all of us. I think he can handle himself. He's proven it to everyone here, but you.

Meta Knight: Sigh… Very well. I can see Kirby's abilities are crucial to your success. Kirby will indeed be an important asset to your team. For now, I will not interfer with destinany. However, Kirby is your responsibility. It is imparitive that no hasrm befall him. You are now his caretakers and I trust he'll grow even stronger under your guidance. Go Kirby. Leave your home and aid these heroes. I'll deal with you again later. I look forward to our next dual.

Peach: Oh come on you can't beat Kirby! Give up already!

Meta Knight: Ah Princess. You do not know the great strengnth I possess. I was merely holding back. Had I unleashed my true powers I would be the ultimate star warrior of legend.

Zelda: If you say so. Samus are we all set to leave?

Meta Knight: If you mean to leave with Kirby you had better do so before the king arrives. Or it may be too late.

Samus: You spoke of a king earlier when you stated you were in service to him. What did you mean?

Meta Knight: I used to be in the royal srervice of King DDD, a monarach who traveled all the way south from his fortress, high atop MT. DDD, and proclaimed himself to be the ruler of all Dreamland. King DDD hoards the citizens' food for himself and demands everyone pay tribute in the form high taxes. The citizens are forced to work very hard so that the king lives well. Anyone who opposes King DDD's rule is forced to contend with his massive armies. Despite this there was one who challenged his rule. A little boy stood up and decided to oppose the might of the king. That boy was Kirby. Since Kirby's arrival here on Popstar Kirby has time and again triumphed over King DDD and brought hope back to the citizens of dreamland. When the king grew weary of battles he could not win he employed me to assassinate Kirby, so that no one could ever again challenge his rule. There was a time when I would've carried this task out. I didn't and still don't believe in the prophecy. If something were to happen to Kirby I would assume the mantle of the true star warrior's leader and fulfill my destiny. When I saw how cruel this king was however to order me to assassanate a mere child, and because of my promise to my commander, I couldn't bring myself to harm Kirby. Still I could not oppose the King's rule. So I played the role of a double agent. I allowed the King to believe I was aiding him in his cause to rid Dreamland of Kirby, but really I spent this whole time caring for Kirby and assisting him when I could. I first became aware of Kirby's great skill when he bested King DDD in the king's very own battle arena. Since than Kirby has bested King DDD on many occasions and with my aid will continue to do so. Now that the king, like all of you, knows of my true intentions I have been branded a trader. He will most likely catch up to… Oh no! ( A loud rumbling sound is heard in the distance) Look over yonder. The King's armies are fast approaching. Hurry! You must take Kirby and flee Popstar before it is too late. Everyone prepares to leave. Link snatches up Kirby and runs.

Peach[size=x-small](running back):[/size] Wait Meta Knight! What about you?

Meta Knight: I'll be fine. I'll hold off the King's armies so you all can escape. Hurry there's not much time!

Peach: But… Meta Knight please. It's not too late! You can join our cause and help Kirby!

Meta Knight: No! Someone must remain here and protect Dreamland's citizens in Kirby's absence. I will fight in his stead. Now go!

Armies are now attacking. Peach runs away closer to the ship. Everyone is on it and it's starting to take off!


Peach: Meta Knight! Don't do this! ( He's being swarmed by hundereds of enemies)

Meta Knight: GO!

The ship takes off. We see Peach looking out the window of the ship all sad. She presses her hand on the glass and kind of lets it slide. She says in a melancholy voice...


Peach: Meta Knight…

Now we see Meta Knight's ship. It now has all these enemies on it with Meta Knight all tied up and bound. We Now see a close up of King DDD. Laughing. The scene ends with his ship flying off in the distance heading toward MT. DDD. Scene ends.

Whew! Well that's it guys. That took a while. Don't know when my next chapter is going up so... Stay tuned...

[Hoeloe]

How have you not taken the hint yet?

NO-ONE HAS READ ANY OF THIS BEYOND THE FIRST (POSSIBLY TWO) POSTS(S), AND NO-ONE CARES ENOUGH TO DO SO.

I thought you'd need it spelling out in large text, since you seem totally oblivious to everyone else who's said it. Sorry if this sounds harsh, but seriously, instead of shrugging off what people say and finding excuses, try listening. You'll never improve the way you're going at the moment.

[Previous]

Do you re-read your writings? I stumbled upon a few spelling errors just within the two half paragraphs I peeked at.

It reads weird how Meta always uses "Kirby" when speaking of Kirby even multiple times in one sentence. Try not to repeat a word too often in too short time. Paraphrase instead (eg "the little bugger") and use common replacements like "him" (I'm not familiar with grammatical terms, not even in my native tongue).

Again, I suggest to split it into smaller parts and to try to polish them. Proofread and check how it sounds, too. You've got spelling errors and typos almost everywhere.

[[robo9]]

NO-ONE HAS READ ANY OF THIS BEYOND THE FIRST (POSSIBLY TWO) POSTS(S), AND NO-ONE CARES ENOUGH TO DO SO

I actually have read just about all of it, but I've yet to post because everything that I could say has been said.

But MakerMatic, please, please, for the love of Allah, try something original. Not a fanfic. You said you've done original stories before. Post them. Fanfics aren't well received, and for good reason. Please, try something original.

[Makermatic21]

Okay everyone. Break time's over! I hope you are all enjoying my original ninja story: Haiku's Quest, which can be found in this section under a different post. For those of you who don't know I was asked to write an original story since people were getting sick of this one. In fact I was asked, and I quote, " In the name of Allah, do something original!" Well, who am I to disappoint Allah, Buddha, Jesus, Shiva, and to some; nobody, or any of you for that matter? So I took a breather from this, wrote something fun and original, and was able to gather my thoughts to bring you all my latest chapter. So without further ado here is:

Chapter 6: Galactic Space Battle:

We see an object whiz by and strike Samus's ship.
Zelda: Oh what now?

Another object pelts the ship.

Peach: Eek! Look out Samus.

Andross boss battle music plays. We now see the original polygon version of Andross show up. It's spitting out polygonal squares that are now pelting Samus's ship from all directions. Her ship is in critical now.

Samus: What in the world is that thing?


Zelda: I don't know, but I think that thing means business you guys.


Samus: Well so do I. Hang on.

Samus uses a built in laser system to fire a ray that blasts the polygon squares to bits. As Samus does her best to fight off Andross we see the Star Fox crew heading to her aid.

Fox: Receiving transmission now R.O.B. Okay gang we've got a distress signal to answer.

Falco: Playing hero again, eh Fox?

Slippy: Be quiet Bird Brain. Someone needs our help.

Peppy: Get to it Fox!

Fox: Ai ai! General Peppy!

Fox: There's our target. Let's get to that ship.

Peppy: R.O.B. is setting coordinates now.

Slippy: Hold it everyone. I'm detecting some sort of force field barrier.

Peppy: Slippy's right. Your path is blocked. You'll have to find another way to reach that ship.

Falco: Hmph. Piece of cake.

The team successfully passes through the force field.

Slippy: We made it! Now too rescue that ship!

Now we see the inside of Samus's ship.

Luigi: Luigi speaks.

Yoshi: Yoshi!

Zelda: What in the world?

Peach: Samus where did all those ships come from?

Fox: This is Fox, commander of Team Star Fox. Do you copy? Over.

Samus: We copy. We could use your help. Over!

Fox: Uh oh! Bad news! Andross is on my radar. That's who's been attacking that ship.

Peppy: Are you sure?

Falco: No way! I thought we blew’im too bits last time.

Peppy: Fox. This doesn't look good. Get out of there!

Fox: What's your current status? Over.

Samus: All passengers are unharmed and ship is still operational. Over.

Fox: Roger that. Your ship is taking a beating from Andross. Get yourselves to safety. We'll handle it from here. Okay everyone. Keep it together. Things are about to get ugly.

Team Star Fox eventually defeats the polygonal side of Andross. However he won't go down that easy...

Andross: Argg! You've defeated my greatest weapon!

As the polygon form of Andross explodes, a polygonal shard hits Samus's ship sending it into a tailspin near an energy field.

Fox: No! That ship!

Slippy: Nooooo!

Falco: Blast there goes our bounty.

Slippy: Don't be so insensitive Falco. We've failed to rescue that ship.

ROB 64: This is indeed an unfortunate set of events.

Andross: (Evil laugh!) You may have defeated my weapon but no matter. I'll destroy you all myself.

The Star Fox Team is now in action once again shooting at Andross. Will our heroes conquer his ape form?

Slippy: Fox look! Andross has recovered.

Peppy: Fox! What will you do now?

Fox: I'll take the fight to him even harder. Andross must pay for what he did to that ship.

Falco: You're going down this time Andross.

Peppy: Careful Falco. Don't get too close.

Falco: Meh! I can take'im.

Slippy: I'll cover you Falco.

Things aren't looking good for our heroes. They might not pull through. If only someone from the their past could intervine and lend them a helping hand...

ROB 64: Detecting a another pilot ion the area. Scanning for identity now in progress.

Krystal: Hi guys need a hand?

Slippy: Krystal! Hey everyone Krystal has joined the frey!

Peppy: How are you Krystal?

Krystal: I'm fine. Thank you. I…

Falco: Hey! Hey! Can the introductions for now. We're in the middle of a battle here!

Fox: Falco's right. Let's finish this! Oh and Krystal?

Krystal: Yes Fox?

Fox: It's good to… have you back on the team.

Krystal: Good to be here.

Andross: Oh good. A happy reunion. Now I can crush all my enemies at once!

Krystal: Dream on Andross.

Andross:You can't escape!

an epic battle ensues and drags on. However with the timely entrance of Krystal the Star Fox team is able to overwhelm Andross and he is ultimately defeated...

Andross: What! Defeated? By the likes of you? This can't beeeeee!

Huge Explosion...

Slippy: We did it!

Falco: Mission complete.

Krystal: Good job everyone!

Falco: Well that's a wrap. Right Fox?... Fox?

We see a sad image of Fox he doesn't respond. A moment passes and than...

Fox: Is everyone okay? (Everyone confirms they are.) Good. I won't lose anyone else today.

Falco: Fox are you still upset about that ship? There was nothing we could do. We…

Fox: Arrived too late. We didn't arrive fast enough. And as a result some innocent bystanders were hurt. We've defeated Andross, but this is a hallow victory. In the end he won. He won…all because I didn't react fast enough. Those people, whoever they were paid the ultimate price.

Slippy: Fox we're really sorry.

Peppy: Fox you all tried your best to…

Fox: It's alright. It's just… I wish we could've saved them. That I could have saved them. Because of me they ended up like... my father.

Peppy: Oh Fox…

Everyone is deeply saddened...

Krystal: Fox. Listen to me. I know you. I'm sure it wasn't your fault. I know you must've done everything you could to save that ship.

Fox: I… just wish… I wish they were okay. Their ship flew into that force filed. Perhaps… no. It's unlikely. Still I wish I knew for sure…

As Fox dwells on what might have been an old rival from the past suddenly appears...

Wolf: Well now. What brings you into our neck of the woods, hm?

Fox: Wolf!

Slippy: Not you guys again!

Leon: Missss usss much bird brain?

Falco: Oh you guys are so…

Krystal: Keep your cool Falco.

Panther: You should listen to the little lady. She is most wise.

Krystal: Panther!

Panther: Hello Mon siere. It has been quite ze while since our paths crossed az eet not?

Wolf: Come on Fox. Think you can keep up?

Fox: Now's not the time for this game Wolf.

Wolf: What's the matter? Scared?

Krystal: Fox. Don't listen to him. He's just trying to bait you.

Peppy: Fox. I have a bad feeling about this.

Fox: Let's do this.

So once again our heroes are forced to do battle. This time with Team Star Wolf...

Fox: This ends now wolf!

Leon: Ha ha! Catch us if you can punks!

Falco: Oh I intend to.

Wolf: You Falco? You squawk too much!

Falco: Why you flea bitten piece of…

Wolf: Flea bitten? Ha! I will be the one to take you down. Play time is over Team Fox.

An inevitable battle occurs between the two factions. Though evenly matched it would be Team Star Fox who comes out on top today...

Fox: Had enough Wolf?

Wolf: Bah! I've wasted enough time toying with the likes of you Fox.

Falco: Not so tough now are ya fleabag?

Wolf: Grr. All units move out. We're done here!

Leon: What! You would have usss retreat to Ssstar Foxxx? Hiss!

Panther: Discretion is the better part of valor. It is always better to live and to love another day.

Krystal: So passionate. Sigh.

Panther: Krystal my darling. Forget these… uncultured folk. Come and fly away with me on a ship of love. We shall make ze beautiful muzik togezer. Like old times. No?

Krystal: Sorry Panther. My place is with Team Star Fox now. This is my life now.

Panther: Ah mon scerie. You would throw away ze good times for zis?

Krystal: Panther… I… Look Panther. We had some really good times but… it won't work out.

Falco: In other words beat it you cad!

Panther: So. Panther is shot down again eh? Well I suppose it was better to have loved and to have lost than to never have loved at all. Oh well. Sigh.

Krystal: Panther. (she sounds upset)

Wolf: Pipe down the lotta ya. We've got bigger fish to fry.

Falco: And what's that supposed to mean?

Panther: It means we're off to collect a large bounty. A bounty that would buy dozens of roses for a lady as fair as Krystal.

Krystal: Oh Panther. You're so romantic. Sigh.

Fox: Alright Wolf. What's this so-called large bounty that Panther's talking about?

Leon: Hss. Get real Fox! Like Wolf would ever tell you that Team Star Wolf will be handsomely rewarded if we can successfully turn in the fugitive Octoman. Ulp! I mean… uh… you didn't hear that Fox. Hsss.

Wolf: Silence, you fool! Alright Fox. Here's the deal. For a hefty price we've agreed to bring in Octoman, but we've had some trouble locating him. Even when we do find him I'm sure I don't have to tell you how dangerous it'll be to take him down. If, however; we had an extra scout team to help us in our search and to be there just in case something did go wrong we know for a fact we can successfully capture him. Seeing as how your team fights for justice in the galaxy I'm sure you would want this dangerous fugitive taken into custody. It seems as though are two teams share a common enemy. We have different motives, yet we seek the same outcome. It is only natural than…

Falco: Oh I get it. You want to team up? Ha! The mighty Team Star Wolf seeking help from rivals Team Star Fox. Well you can forget it pal. Fox would never join the likes of you Wolf!

Wolf: I do believe I was addressing your commander. Butt your big beak out of others' affairs feather brain.

Falco: Feather brain? Who you calling feather brain you flea-bitten piece of…

Fox: Falco! That's enough.

Falco: Fox! You seriously can't be considering…

Fox: I said enough! We should at least hear what Wolf has to say before making any rash decisions. Alright Wolf. You have my attention. I'm listening.

Wolf: Oh you're listening are you? Well than listen good Fox! We're not friends. Team Star Wolf would never ask for help from the likes of you and your rag-tag band of half wits. I just figured that you of all people Fox would know how elusive and dangerous Octoman can be. But I suppose if your not up to the task or if this matter is to much of a challenge for you and your crew I guess Team Star Wolf shall have to do this alone. Of course not only do we get to enjoy such a generous bounty; but we get to prove to everyone who the best team in the galaxy really is. I'll enjoy watching your reputation go up in flames Fox. As I said before I will be the one to take you down.

Falco: You ever hear you lore more flies with honey than you do vinegar Wolf?

Wolf: Ah Falco. While I've come to admire your fighting spirit; much more than your captain's I must say, I do believe Team Star Wolf has the upper hand. We only care about the bounty. Your Team supposedly believes in justice. So now that we know where we stand, will you join us or not?

Leon: Hss. I object! Us join forces with Team Star Fox? I'd rather die than…

Wolf: I didn't ask you! I'm the commander in charge now zip it! ( Transmission is temporarily cut off. We now see the inside of Team Star Wolf's ship) Leon. Panther. I need you two to trust me. I'm only doing this temporarily. Once we've turned in Octoman and collected our bounty we'll take care of Fox and his motley crew once and for all. Don't worry I have a plan…

( Meanwhile we now see the inside of Team Star Fox's ship.)

Falco: I don't like it one bit Fox. I'm tell'in ya their up to something. Plus. You heard what he said about us; about you.

Slippy: Falco's right. We can't trust them Fox.

ROB 64: Success of capturing fugitive Octoman alone: 40%. Success of capturing fugitive Octoman collaborating with Team Star Wolf: 83.9%. Analysis shows odds aligning with rivals improves rate of success exponetiinally. Confirmed data indicates team Star Wolf to be a boon rather than a hindrance. Formation of Team Star Wolf and Team Star Fox collaborating on objective is critical to success of the objective. However, past data indicates Team Star Wolf to be most uncooperative. Factored in the % of overall success of both teams collaborating is still 83.9%. There is a 16.1% chance of mission failure resulting in a stand off between both teams.

Peppy: Okay. Thanks ROB. You have a… uh… valid point too. Guess it's up to Fox to decide.

Krystal: We'll support any decision you make commander.

Fox: Thank you Krystal. Alright team I've taken everything you've all had to say into consideration. Now before I make my decision I want to weigh the pros and cons. Now…we're all familiar with Team Star Wolf's shady past. At first the choice would seem clear. Considering all the trouble Team Star Wolf has caused us in the past we won't accept any help from them.

Falco: Yes! I knew you'd make the right decision Fox!

Fox: Hold on Falco. I'm not finished yet. Ahem. Although my gut instinct tells me not to trust them we've been given a great opportunity that can't be ignored. We should consider joining.

Falco: WHAT!

Fox: We all know the seriousness of this situation. If left free who knows what heinous acts Octoman and his fellow Octorians would commit. Octoman must be brought to justice. Like R.O.B. said there are strength in numbers. Only through unity can we accomplish our goals.

Falco: Yeah… I don't think that old bucket of nuts and bolts said all that.

Fox: Regardless, we can't do this by ourselves. We have a real opportunity here, but we need to sacrifice. That is why I've decided to accept Team Star Wolf's offer to take down this menace once and for all. This alliance is risky, but necessary to ensure peace throughout the galaxy. Plus this alliance is only temporary. Once we bring Octoman to justice we can focus on turning in Wolf and his cronies. If we play our cards just right we may be able to successfully bring down multiple space convicts in one successful sting operation. We work with Team Star Wolf for now, we turn'em in later. Everyone got it?

Falco: I really think you've lost it Fox.

ROB 64: The enemy of my enemy is my friend. An excellent tactic to employ.

Fox: Well said ROB. Alright everyone. I'm going to give our good friend Wolf the news. (Fox now sends a signal out to Team Star Wolf.) Team Star Wolf this is Fox, commander of Team Star Fox. Do you read me? Over.

Wolf: Loud and clear Fox. So What's it gonna be? Have we got a deal?

Fox: If you agree to the terms of a truce between our to factions, than we accept.

Wolf: A truce huh? Snicker. Yes, of course we'll accept a truce. I'm not unreasonable. I'm sure our two factions can work something out.

Fox: All right than it's official. Team we will now aid Team Star Wolf in the capture of the fugitive Octoman. All ships move out.

Slippy: Everyone be careful.

Krystal: Let's all stay close.

Peppy: Get ready everyone.

Falco: I still don't like this one bit.

Leon: Well than. That makes two of us doesn't it? Hsss.

Panther: Well, well Krystal. Looks like you and Panther have an important date… with destiny I mean.

Krystal: Right. A date… with destiny… sigh.

Panther: Just like old times after all eh monsceri?